Beans swimming in the school pool

Beans Moment (Energy)

WALT choose words that describe a moment for the reader

YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS

• begin in the action
• present tense (I am, not I was)
• short, sharp sentences
• uses the senses (smell, taste, look, hear, touch)
• strong verbs

Swimming in the school pool!!!!!
I am waiting to dive now it is my turn I am very nervous. I put my hands together I dive like a dolphin. Splash. My Mum says “ were you nervous? yes I say”. I decided to do  freestyle. Off I went. I was going as fast as I can. I look to the side of me my friend had already finished. I hopped out of the pool. I get a stick you came forth said Mr Ford. My mum was proud of me.

The first person who won went home so I got into the final. So I dive into the pool. I  hear people kicking and people cheering for their houses  and my Mum cheering for me. I taste the yakey of the of water  I can see my friend again. I came sixth I walk to my Mum she put a towel around me.

We need  one more person. They picked me. I jumped into the pool. Splash. I  was holding the noodle “ put the noodle under your legs” shouted Mr Ford and “ imagine it was a horse”. I started  to run with the noodle. I hopped out of the pool and tagged the next person I sat at the end of the line  I jump back in again.